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Title: STING by Kiah Roache-Turner (2024) Post by: Pitchpatch on April 30, 2024, 12:36 PM https://www.imdb.com/title/tt20112746/
Logline "After raising an unnervingly talented spider in secret, 12-year-old Charlotte must face the facts about her pet-and fight for her family's survival-when the once-charming creature rapidly transforms into a giant, flesh-eating monster." Discussion Woven through this LL (oh god, I went there) are the clues announcing/screaming which famous book will be this movie's touchstone. I can't decide if piggybacking (dammit, no) on Charlotte's Web is incredibly on-the-nose or absolutely required to lift this LL a tenth of an inch above "forgettable." I suppose we try it both ways. Lots of fluff smothering this logline. Let's begin by ripping off the padding, see what remains. "A 12-year-old must protect her family from the talented spider she secretly raised when it becomes a giant flesh-eating monster." Forgettable. Is it better if we reinstate the Charlotte's Web stuff? "12-year-old Charlotte must protect her family from the charming spider she secretly raised when it mutates into a giant flesh-eating monster." The book callback is the only memorable thing in this LL. No question, it has to stay. 38 words down to 24. No point fluffing a threadbare logline. Riff track Can we inject something, anything to make a silk purse out of this sow's ear (SSSOMEBODY STAAAP ME!)? "12-year-old Charlotte must save her city from the charming spider she secretly raised when it mutates into the world's most dangerously well-intentioned arachnid superhero." |