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Author Topic: Feedback for my original script "When Yesterday Was Tomorrow"  (Read 2248 times)
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Daryl Zer0
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« on: June 05, 2012, 08:57 PM »

Sent my pages to [email protected] Hope someone can review. If so, thanks!
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Daryl Zer0
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« Reply #1 on: June 05, 2012, 10:18 PM »

Just posted it on talentville as well.
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« Reply #2 on: June 06, 2012, 12:04 AM »

Hi, DZ.

It's a one-horse town round these parts, with me being the sole 10PTTer so far.  That's okay.  But it does mean those who post their ten pages aren't likely to get satisfaction in a timely manner.  Me choosing pages to 10PTT and scheduling the work is about as random as random gets.

I can't guarantee I'll 10PTT your pages, but thank you for sending them.  That goes out not just to DZ but to everyone who has or will ask me to 10PTT their stuff.

Anyone who wants to take a shot at doing a 10PTT can email or pm DZ directly to get a copy of his pages.

Oh, and just because I neglect to 10PTT somebody's pages, don't take that as negative judgement against the work.  Being more of a mechanic than a creator, if I could I'd happily spend all day doing 10PTTs to get that delicious flush of contentment that comes from performance tuning a paragraph, not unlike that loop sequence from BRAINSTORM.  Yeah, that one.  So thank heavens I need to pay for more than electricity and an internet connection on a daily basis.
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Daryl Zer0
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« Reply #3 on: June 06, 2012, 12:46 AM »

Hi, DZ.

It's a one-horse town round these parts, with me being the sole 10PTTer so far.  That's okay.  But it does mean those who post their ten pages aren't likely to get satisfaction in a timely manner.  Me choosing pages to 10PTT and scheduling the work is about as random as random gets.

I can't guarantee I'll 10PTT your pages, but thank you for sending them.  That goes out not just to DZ but to everyone who has or will ask me to 10PTT their stuff.

Anyone who wants to take a shot at doing a 10PTT can email or pm DZ directly to get a copy of his pages.

Oh, and just because I neglect to 10PTT somebody's pages, don't take that as negative judgement against the work.  Being more of a mechanic than a creator, if I could I'd happily spend all day doing 10PTTs to get that delicious flush of contentment that comes from performance tuning a paragraph, not unlike that loop sequence from BRAINSTORM.  Yeah, that one.  So thank heavens I need to pay for more than electricity and an internet connection on a daily basis.


Thank you for taking the time PP. I appreciate it anyway. I had a few people read it and said they liked. But I am hoping for a tougher critique. If you get to it, you do. Thanks again:)
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« Reply #4 on: June 06, 2012, 02:14 AM »

I messaged pitchpatch about me taking a stab at a 10PTT on your first 10 pages.  Obviously my notes would be different than his as we each read scripts differently but if you wanted some honest feedback on your script I would give it. 

Pitch gives a lot more feedback than I do but I would be honest and give you my thoughts.. oh and I would still make red marks on it like he does.  Smiley
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Daryl Zer0
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« Reply #5 on: June 06, 2012, 04:01 AM »

I messaged pitchpatch about me taking a stab at a 10PTT on your first 10 pages.  Obviously my notes would be different than his as we each read scripts differently but if you wanted some honest feedback on your script I would give it. 

Pitch gives a lot more feedback than I do but I would be honest and give you my thoughts.. oh and I would still make red marks on it like he does.  Smiley

I would very much appreciate it. I've already skimmed some of your posts regarding sales made. I appreciate you keep track of these. It is encouraging and very informative. Thanks T and J:)
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« Reply #6 on: June 06, 2012, 02:43 PM »

I would very much appreciate it. I've already skimmed some of your posts regarding sales made. I appreciate you keep track of these. It is encouraging and very informative. Thanks T and J:)

Yeah, I kind of lost track of keeping up with those sales... not enough time for everything.  
Give me a week or two and I will have some thoughts on your 10P.  Pitch e-mailed it to me this morning.  

Edit: I have 200 posts!  Which puts me in 3rd place on the site.  Not bad considering the two motor mouthed individuals in front of me.
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Daryl Zer0
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« Reply #7 on: June 06, 2012, 05:37 PM »

I would very much appreciate it. I've already skimmed some of your posts regarding sales made. I appreciate you keep track of these. It is encouraging and very informative. Thanks T and J:)

Yeah, I kind of lost track of keeping up with those sales... not enough time for everything.  
Give me a week or two and I will have some thoughts on your 10P.  Pitch e-mailed it to me this morning.  

Edit: I have 200 posts!  Which puts me in 3rd place on the site.  Not bad considering the two motor mouthed individuals in front of me.

Thanks T&J. I will check back in a week or so. I found a couple more things already just skimming through it againon Talentville:)
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